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SYAC - Art Speak by TomPreston SYAC - Art Speak by TomPreston
This is a series I call “So You’re a Cartoonist?” which deals with all of the typical questions or remarks I receive whenever I tell people that I draw cartoons for a living.

This is based on an actual conversation I overheard one of my art friends utter. I often forget that ‘normal’ people don’t know some of my artistic terminology. An “S” curve is used to describe any sort of flowing S shape in nature. More often than not S curves can be found on women, but they also appear on men from time to time. In this instance I’m using it to describe his back. Perhaps I should have said something along the lines of “nice muscle development” or something...

BTW: they’re suppose to be in an elevator. I suck at drawing elevators and I had a really hard time with it so I hope it’s clear enough. He’s going to the 6th floor, and I want to go to the 5th. I’m on the 3rd floor and as I enter I push the button for 5th, so we travel up. I get off at my destination while he continues on wondering what just happened. I’m writing this because during the livestream there was some confusion over what’s going on with the numbers and I just wanted to make it clear.
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although you show that the car is on it's way to the 6th floor, this last panel is awkward in terms of pacing. i think you ask a little too much of your audience to notice the digital numbers above the control panel and get that you have left the elevator. sure , people will eventually get it, but i think it hurts the flow for a good gag to work.

i think having the last panel show"5" with action lines of you zipping off frame would've been better. or if you didn't want that type of wacky tone to your gag, you could've tried solving the problem in a subtler way like....well, picture all your previous frames lit a little dimly. on your last panel you could've just shown a cast lit door way up against the back of the elevator wall. that with the "5" above the control panel, would've been a much more effective approach to solving this problem.

you could've also tried a solution that's not as traditional as the straight on, horizon line smack center of the frame, camera angle used in a lot of gag strips. have you though about using the POV of a security camera in the elevator? i thing that would've been a lot more interesting than what you've done here.

i do like your work in general. the drawings are nice and i can tell that they are in an elevator...so there's a lot that's positive here.

i just think you can be a lot more effective in making your point. hope this helps and good luck :)
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