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This is a rough sketch for a poster I want to make with SYAC. There's a lot wrong with it, I know, so I want as much advice as possible.

All feedback is welcome and encouraged.
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Critique by =WolfPawDragonClaw Feb 17, 2012, 11:30:44 AM
Lemme explain the stars first.
Vision: Has a lot of potential.
Originality: The concept isn't that "new" or original.
Technique: It's just a sketch right now. Pretty much anyone can sketch.
Impact: I have no clue what to put there.


For the actual critique... The guy who I'm pretty sure is Joe (the big guy) looks a little pained in his expression. But I'm not entirely sure how to fix it, sorry. :(

Carl looks slightly different than his other pictures. His forehead here might be slightly too big? :?

And when inking and whatnot, maybe try to pay attention to the fingers? Some of the hands look slightly "off", sorry. Pam's comes to mind. Okay, some homework for you is to make a fist in a mirror and pay attention to how visible the "outline" of each finger is at different angles. And stuff like that.


As for the "you". The pose looks good, but it could be better and more.... powerful. You know what I mean? Maybe arch his/your back a bit more and move the hips over to the left more too (because of how arching his back might make the rest of him move more too). And maybe move his left leg (the leg on our right) further to the right just a tad.



Hope this helps and please don't be offended. :(
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Critique by ~metorsummoner Feb 17, 2012, 3:25:47 AM
Wow its been a while since I actually critiqued artwork in the progress. First, it seems that it is slightly unbalanced, but I guess if you add the title it will work out. I'm not a fan of the bulleye design, but you bring some radial design elements in to the picture. Which, to me seems to add to the overall effect of the design. I take the border is the outside edge, but I think Tenko and Carl's heads should come a bit inward. I think you have the right focus amount on yourself. At this point I see a strong design that may or may not need some minor tweaks.
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~AvraTheLittleArtist Jul 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
It really nice ...im a big fan (?) of your work :)... Er where can i find similar et paper to this to sketch ???or the oublisher gave it to ya :|
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Mood: Adoration ~xXIshisuXx May 2, 2012
dat ish one badass sketch ewe
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Mood: Joy ~Swarrm Apr 26, 2012
Looks like a "ten Commandments" type of thing
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Mood: Joy ~Pentaro22 Apr 18, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
He's a badass!!!!!
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~Klecktacular Mar 17, 2012  Student Digital Artist
You're probably not going to read this but your back looks really stiff and the other characters look abnormally large in comparison to you
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*littlelead Mar 6, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I can see Tenko but where's Chloe? She's my favorite!
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~xion088 Mar 3, 2012  Student General Artist
epic sketchiness in the sketchy sketch. -.-
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~RynnLight Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know it's just a sketch, but I wanted to fav it anyways XD
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~TsawlaEltuTsamsiyu Feb 22, 2012  Student General Artist
It looks good! There's not much I can say that you could do with this because it's just a sketch, or rather there's too much I could say! I'd like to see it a little later down the road and maybe then I'll have some more precise advice for you.
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~naivety-alwaysamazed Feb 22, 2012
My friends reading over my shoulder said, "That is hardcore." So we all approve.

No, these are not the same friends that live inside my head. Those are different ones.
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